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Dullness rests over me
Like a blanket
Hopelessness sits beside me
As company to a weary soul
I feel dead
Dead inside
Dead to the world

My mind sleeps
In dark despair
My heart breaks in anguish
I am surrounded
Yet totally alone
As none can pierce the darkness
That now surrounds me

The icy numbness
Pervades my body
Chilling me to reality
Keeping my heart
From the truth
Sheltering me
From the light of day

I hide in the darkness, alone
Unable to face the world
Or its many sorrows
All I can do is sit silently
Here in my little corner
And cry out with my mind,
Screaming to the heavens
Well, this is a sad piece, because sad times have once again visited my town. A boy a grade below me was stabbed Sunday night. He died this morning. My heart is with his sister, and only immediate family. They lost their mother two years ago, about the same time Kelsey died. Tyler was on the Varsity Football team, and would have been a starter next year. Please keep Chelsie in your thoughts and prayers.
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
...:hug:
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks...
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
anytime.
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lahere Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry for the loss. :hug:
I like this poem, you convey your emotions so clearly, I find the poem rather powerful,
"Hopelessness sits beside me
As company to a weary soul" << beautiful lines which moved me.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I tend to write poetry only when I am feeling an extreemly strong emotion, so I'm glad that it shines through.
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emothemurdok Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2005
it's got some nice imagery, but sadly very cliche. Try getting out of yourself, writing something you wouldn't normally write. A poem about calculators. A poem about falling down the stairs. :) Keep writing! I wish you the best in your future forrays into the Art of poetry and prose.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, yeah it is cliched, a lot of my stuff is, unfortunately. I hope it doesn't overshadow the deep feelings, the emotions of the poem, though. I write most of my poetry when I am feeling a strong emotion of some kind, and thats what I hope shines through, even if the piece does need some work.

I have to say, my prose is somewhat better. If you like fantasy. Anyways thanks^^
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gifts-raemanzu Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2005  Student Writer
That's really great...your poetry is so meaningful and honest.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I hope all my poetry comes across that way, and not as some sort of cheesy crap, because there are always deep, heartfelt emotions behind everything I write.
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Kismet-Neko Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2005
Very sorrowful, it conveys much emotion. I am sorry for you Kuro and your mate. If this poem truly reflects what you are feeling then I wish dearly that your heart shall no longer ache so and your mind no longer be so tormente, it a heart-wrenching thing to read.
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