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I am alone
Upon the throne.
Door locked.
Peace.

Steps outside the door
Soft and stealthy
Creek, creek, creek.
They go up the stairs.

Overhead a cry
suprise, fright
Pounding feet
Down the stairs

The nob jiggles,
Pounding, pounding, pounding,
A terrible scream.

I am safe, nothing can touch me.
Blood runs under the door.
Not my best poetry to be sure, but this piece was begging to be written, so thats what I did. I can't deny a begging piece of work.
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:iconpaladin343:
Paladin343 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
creepy, but interesting.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Heh ^^; Yeah, its a weird little poem..
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:iconpaladin343:
Paladin343 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
sometimes that happens.
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:iconkuroinami:
kuroinami Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
:shrug: I suppose
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gifts-raemanzu Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2005  Student Writer
Wow, this is great! I like the whole feel behind this, really great, and a very simple but cool story.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
lol, thank you^^
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Omnicontemplation Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2005
Well, first thing I noticed... creak is spelled with an a when used onomatopoeically, also, in both uses of the triple word, I think periods might help you drive it in a bit more, rather than commas... typo in surprise, it's missing an r... ...knob has a k on the beginning :) ... good job, all in all... scary poem though, as far as content. :)
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:iconkuroinami:
kuroinami Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the comments, they are much appreciated.
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Omnicontemplation Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2005
np.
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TakJak Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2005  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*throws head back and laughs maniacally* i wish i was the one who wrote this...*jealous* :) sweet stuff, punk n_~
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