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Have you forgotten what happened that day?
How we all screamed and ran and covered our eyes
How death ended so many precious lives
How children cried for moms and dads
Who would never come to comfort them again.

Have you forgotten the images we saw?
How the smoke filled the screen
How the screams filled our ears
How perfect strangers huddled together
The rich and the poor trying to comfort one another

Have you forgotten the brave sacrifice?
How people ran in when everyone else ran out
How they battled the flames and the smoke
How they went back again and again
And went back one last time, and won't go home again.

Have you forgotten our fervent prayers?
How we hoped for survivors
How we poured out donations
How we came together for one cause
Even as our hopes were dashed time and again

Have you forgotten the horrible tragedy?
How thousands died without reason
How each day children are parentless
How loved ones made that one last call
Before crashing a plane to save us all

Have you forgotten the value of life?
How we swore we would avenge them
How we said we would bring killers to justice
How we promised that we would make the world
A safer place for all children

Have you forgotten the day that changed our lives?
So I realise I haven't written any poetry in a while, and I'm sorry, I just haven't been depressed. I'm not particularly depressed now, just angry about the people who want us to pull out of Iraq imediately. Its stupid. Period, end of story. What you would get would be far worse than the Taliban ever were. No we need to see it through. Even if you don't agree with this, at least read the poem, there's something else.

Style notes: Don't tell me that you don't like my punctuation, I have it like it is for a reason. Other than that there are a few end rhymns, but nothing throughout the entire poem.








Yeah, if you can't tell what this is about think back to September four years ago.
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xXProwlXx Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i agree with both your poem and your point of view. if we really backed out of iraq, they'd just come back and bomb us again. they'd probably go nuclear and kill millions, so the little "no brain anti-war person against all this" is a bunch of bull to me. i got no problem with people who are against war, but it pisses me off when people are like we dont need this war, its bad for the economy and crap. war is necessary, and this war wouldnt even be here if the taliban hadnt killed so many of our own in the first place.
sorry about my rant, heh, sorry
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CheekyValiance Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
I can't read about 9/11 for another 20 years. in future generations this peom may be famous (to those children who did not live through 9/11) but to write about 9/11 evokes powerful images more personal to the audience and makes them almost callous to your poem.. it's well written, but I'm numb to it by now.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
I was angry when I wrote it. Very angry, people seemed to have forgotten all of those feeling you described, and I don't think they should forget, at least, not for a while.
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gifts-raemanzu Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2005  Student Writer
*nods* very meaningful...thank you for writing it. *thoughtful silence*
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. I'm glad you got something from it.
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LadyShadowblade Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2005
Wow.
Good style choice of asking questions, because it does make the reader question themself. Simple but elegant language, extremely evocative. :cries:
I'm glad you wrote this...too many people have forgotten the tragedy and the sacrifice of that day...
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, though I don't feel especially deserving of your praise. There are some flow problems that I'm going to have to correct later. I'm glad you liked it, though.
And as far as I'm concerned, the world will NEVER be allowed to forget 9/11
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LadyShadowblade Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2005
Oh pshaw. My philospohy is if you receive praise, you've earned it.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, well, you can't argue with that I guess, lol
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vaneral Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
Very moving. Mah neh, it feels like some people have forgotten. But it's welcome to know there are others who haven't.

I'm glad you're actually informed about the war. IT's frustrating talking to people who only listen to the media. My dad went over twice and said the exact same thing--the iraqis want us there and are grateful. This was truly a pleasure to read.
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