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Splashing, crashing
Roaring, dashing
The waves beat heavily
Against the shore.
Yet even in the large
Swells of water
Blue-green tails
Still do flutter
Only one, though, while
Playing in the kelp
Heard his desperate
Cries for help

In the high surge
On a ship about to give
A man sacrificed himself
So another might live.
Down he sank,
Under crashing wave
Sure that this
Would be his grave.
From the kelp beds
She watched him sink
And she leapt forward
Before she could think.

She swam to him and
Took him in her arm
Then swam to the surface,
Much to his alarm.
When they reached the shore
She gently let him go
She then sang to him
A song all mermaids know
          “People shun me because
          Of who I am
          I am something
          They don’t understand
          You are you
          And I am me
          I’m just a creature
          Of the sea.”
Then she turned,
Man watching in wonder,
And swam off even
In the continuing thunder.

He watched her go
With some little trepidation
Thinking on her words
In silent contemplation.
If more people knew
The wonders of the sea
What kind of place
Would our world be?
Would we be kinder?
Would we all love more?
Its something we might
Never know here on shore.
Mm, so a not so long epic poem for Talkos. Sorry this isn't humorous like Sascha's, but it's the best that I can do. So yeah, hope you liked it.
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happyone52000 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem... this is great... keep them coming...
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, thanks, glad that you liked it^^
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happyone52000 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
welcome...
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TakJak Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"A man sacrificed himself
So another might live."

That's so sad...but I'm glad he did live, in the end. Awesome poem, btw.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad that you liked it^^
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Havoc892 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2007
Hey, it works. Did you use a base as an example (like Beowulf or Grettir's Saga) or just a stab in the dark?

-Havoc
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
I've read a couple of epics, but this wasn't based on anything, only my imagination.
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Havoc892 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2007
Ah. Then I recommend more of 'em!

-Havoc
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
More imagination?
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Havoc892 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2007
No, read more epic literature. Some of it is really interesting.

-Havoc
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