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I stand here today
Alone in the crowd
Totally abandoned
Even though Iím surrounded
And the voices, they come
To torment my poor soul
And point out the things
Iíd rather left untold

Chorus:
I can see myself
With crystal clarity
My flaws on display
Theyíre all I can see
Iím alone with myself
Whatís left of me, that is
And I just canít escape
This beautiful madness

This beautiful madness

With my imperfections shining
Like bloody gems in a row
I just keep wondering
How everyone doesnít know
That I turn from the light
So that it wonít show
More dark secrets I hide
Deep in my black soul

Chorus:
I can see myself
With crystal clarity
My flaws on display
Theyíre all I can see
Iím alone with myself
Whatís left of me, that is
And I just canít escape
This beautiful madness

This beautiful madness

I fight by myself to keep
Whatís left of my sanity
I fight to keep myself out
To not know all about me
Some people journey to find themselves
And come back with only lies
While I struggle with the dark truths
My poor soul canít hide

Chorus:
I can see myself
With crystal clarity
My flaws on display
Theyíre all I can see
Iím alone with myself
Whatís left of me, that is
And I just canít escape
This beautiful madness

This beautiful madness

To see oneís self
Is a beautiful thing?
Sometimes I wonder
Okay, so Iím always wondering,
If the sight of a soul
Is so undeniably good
Why do I writhe here in torment?
Maybe Iíve just misunderstood, but

Chorus:
I can see myself
With crystal clarity
My flaws on display
Theyíre all I can see
Iím alone with myself
Whatís left of me, that is
And I just canít escape
This beautiful madness

And I just canít escape
This beautiful madness
Okay, so the title's a little weird, but the song explains it. I wrote this after talking with Kat on our very different views of what madness is. And the more I thought about it, the more I realised that there HAD to be more than one type of madness, I've actually seen a couple different types. Anyways, this is the type (at least I think it is) that Kat was talking about.

Inspired from listening to Superchic[k]'s Stand in the Rain one too many times. No, the lyric, message, and overall feel are nothing alike. I just like background music while I work.

This is also inspired by Blood and Sunglasses Copywrite I'd recomend it, especially if you are interested in very well written psycological torment and/or vampires.
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synthwrr Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006
Awesome.

... awesome.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad that you like it. Any other feed back would also be appreciated.
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synthwrr Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006
my brain is a bowl of cream
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
:lmao: Ah, yes, I have indeed known this feeling before, tis why it took my so long to comment on your last poem. It wasn't that I didn't like it, it was that I felt I couldn't do it justice.
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synthwrr Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006
Now you're making me feel guilty =P
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
:O_o: Guilty? Thats odd, I had no intentions of doing so...
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synthwrr Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006
Ah, because you actually wait till you can do justice to a work... while I just apologize for my brainlessness and say nothing whatsoever.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
lol, tis fine. I'm a comment whore and will take any I can get.
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LadyShadowblade Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006
I would like to say first of all, very nice. I really enjoyed the contrast between images of darkness and clarity.
Have you ever read the poem Love Song of a Mad Girl? (Or maybe it's Mad Girl's Love Song, I can't remember).
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Hm, no, can't say that I have? Do you know who wrote it?

And I'm glad that you liked this.
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LadyShadowblade Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006
I believe the poet is Anne Sexton.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Hm, I shall have to look that up.
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Triantarrine Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006   Writer
This. Is. Just. Blinding. :jawdrop:
It's the perfect embodiment of what I meant when speaking of madness. Not to mention the wording you used, the chorus, everything...I absolutely adored the feel of it...A sort of beautiful, painful, unescapable torment that you're not sure if you actually want to escape...
^^; Surry...I seem to be waffling on.
Wonderful poem, duck.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
So you like it?
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Triantarrine Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006   Writer
very much so. :heart:
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
hehe, do you think you can use it?
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Triantarrine Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006   Writer
You'd let me?
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Thats why I wrote it, dear
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Triantarrine Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006   Writer
oh. ^^; Thank you. I shall try to do it justice.
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
lol, think nothing of it. I wrote it for your B&S series. I just hope that it fits.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... I agree. This is definetly something I've struggled with. Looking into yourself, all you see is the shame doubt blame and regrets.. *uhoh* Song reminder! You might know him, Rich Mullins...

Somehow... All I really need to know is if

You who live in eternity here the
prayers of those of us who live in time.
We can't see whats ahead
And we cannot get free
of what we've left behind
I'm realling from these voices
that keep screaming in my ears
all the words of shame
and doubt blame and regret
I can't see how your leading my
unless you led me here
where I'm lost enough...
to let my self be led
And so you've been here all along I guess
It's just your ways
and you are just plain hard to get.

The last verse of the song "Hard to Get" by Rich Mullins, a very tallented and sadly dead song writer ;( BUt its ok, cause the song is awesome! And so is your poem!!!
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thanks. Actually, I've never heard any of Mr. Mullins's songs before. This, however, makes me very curious^^ Its kind of weird that our songs sound a little alike, but I guess its something that a lot of people deal with. I know I have.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Well.. its not bad :) And its not "sound" allike, its just reminds me of the lyrics. He wrote many good songs... you might know of one, "Awesome God" *maybe*

Here are the rest of the lyrics.

You who live in heaven
Hear the prayers of those of us who live on earth
Who are afraid of being left by those we love
And who get hardened by the hurt
Do you remember when You lived down here where we all scrape
To find the faith to ask for daily bread
Did You forget about us after You had flown away
Well I memorized every word You said
Still I'm so scared, I'm holding my breath
While You're up there just playing hard to get

You who live in radiance
Hear the prayers of those of us who live in skin
We have a love that's not as patient as Yours was
Still we do love now and then
Did You ever know loneliness
Did You ever know need
Do You remember just how long a night can get?
When You were barely holding on
And Your friends fall asleep
And don't see the blood that's running in Your sweat
Will those who mourn be left uncomforted
While You're up there just playing hard to get?

And I know you bore our sorrows
And I know you feel our pain
And I know it would not hurt any less
Even if it could be explained
And I know that I am only lashing out
At the One who loves me most
And after I figured this, somehow
All I really need to know

Is if You who live in eternity
Hear the prayers of those of us who live in time
We can't see what's ahead
And we can not get free of what we've left behind
I'm reeling from these voices that keep screaming in my ears
All the words of shame and doubt, blame and regret
I can't see how You're leading me unless You've led me here
Where I'm lost enough to let myself be led
And so You've been here all along I guess
It's just Your ways and You are just plain hard to get
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
>.> Its what I meant but didn't communicate very clearly.

As for the song, it sounds familiar, but I just can't quite place it. >.< Wish that I could hear it.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
I see ;)
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