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The small stream flows
The small stream flows
The laughing water swirls
The laughing water swirls
Small the laughing swirls
Water flows the stream

Liquid burbles over rocks
Liguid burbles over rocks
Happy is the sound
Happy is the sound
Liquid sound over rocks
Is the happy burbles

'Round corners it goes
'Round corners it goes
Playing all the time
playing all the time
The playing it goes
'Round corners all time

'Round corner the water
The laughing flows stream
The time is happy
Liquid swirls over rocks
All playing it goes
Small burbles the sound
Okay, so I know you all are going "What the heck is a Paradelle"? Well I'll tell you, its a type of poem. Duh. Anyways, I was hanging around the PoetryPlease chatroom when (drumroll please) There was a challenge! Now, you know me, never one to turn down a challenge. Well, here's the result.
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TakJak Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you put "Liguid" in there once, otherwise that's the only mistake i see -^__^- it's a funny type of poem, huh? :D it's so cute though :3
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
oops^^;

I really enjoyed doing this poem! I had no idea there was such a thing until the challenge.
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TakJak Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
it looks like fun too! :D
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Tis. You and Kai should try it.
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ElManta Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2006
merg, i can't make critiques this early, at least not in english...but really good, no spelling errors detected...
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
lol, just cause there arn't spelling errors doesn't mean its good.
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ElManta Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2006
...i meant: it's good and no spelling errors this time...meh, it was morning, i was tired...
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
lol, its okay.
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ElManta Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2006
-.-....just got very tired, all of a sudden...
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Aw. Drink some tea, it will help.
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ElManta Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2006
.....i don't like tea....
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Aw...
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stoicnimwit Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006
:D Well, even though the style is a little odd (I've never heard of it before), this poem seems really happy ^^ It stirs up images of a peaceful little creek that I played in a few summers ago when stopping for lunch on a horseback riding adventure

:heart: I think it's admirable, taking challenges!
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
lol, thanks. Trust me, I'd never heard of the style either before I took the challenge^^;

I'm glad you liked it!
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stoicnimwit Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006
:D Poetry is so much fun to play with!
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kuroinami Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed it is. I adore playing with words, and that’s basically what this style was doing. I have to say, I thoroughly enjoyed it^^
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